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Another moon by ~Sober-Irish-Guy:iconSober-Irish-Guy:

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There was a full moon last night.
I stared and thought, or tried to think
But under gleaming sable light I found -

Only silence.

Just stared, I - not blinking, thinking -
No silver stars out winking,
Just - the moon.

Brightened sky with too few clouds.
High pressure; precious moon.


Again, I look and see (so early! Still it's bright)
A new moon, but no longer new
Second quarter, nearing full.
Another month -
Gone, and -

Oh, the silence !
©2006-2009 ~Sober-Irish-Guy
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Submitted: November 18, 2006
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Rewrite of an older poem ("So many moons"), now in scraps.

Just thought it could do with a fresh tone.
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~AmourEtFeu:iconAmourEtFeu: Nov 20, 2006, 7:39:29 AM
I really like the way it flows and rhymes. The subject is shallow, yet provides for deep thoughts at the same time. Nice job.

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~Sober-Irish-Guy:iconSober-Irish-Guy: Nov 20, 2006, 2:08:16 PM
Thank you for the comment.
~AmourEtFeu:iconAmourEtFeu: Nov 22, 2006, 12:45:50 PM
No reason to thank me but you're welcome.

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~beatnik696:iconbeatnik696: Dec 8, 2006, 4:24:12 PM
cool. thought id read one after recovering from the whole porn page i opened last time i tried to read one :)
~Sober-Irish-Guy:iconSober-Irish-Guy: Dec 9, 2006, 2:27:19 PM
o.-.0 !

Thanks... and I think we need an explination about the porn comment.
~beatnik696:iconbeatnik696: Jan 28, 2007, 2:12:33 AM
Dude it was porn all over your page. seriuosly....trauma trauma. and it wasnt even good porn if i remember correctly. been missing ddr like its no bodoes business recently tis so gay like. a well if i ever get a free mo. ill waddle on down (sniffle sniffle sob) so much homework so little funtime
Mood: Optimism ~cursive-starlight:iconcursive-starlight: Mar 3, 2007, 1:30:10 PM
This is a very neat poem. I like the use of dramatic pause. I also really love the way you used the parantheses in the last stanza. And the end is so amazing! Very well written. :+favlove:

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